Not bad, not bad at all, though you should space out your paragraphs more when they take place at different times, and try to skip a line after somebody talks. I had to learn that one the hard way. It's a little confusing to see everything so jumbled together. But other than that, fantastic!
"What'll we do with ourselves this afternoon? And the day after that, and the next thirty years?"-- F. Scott Fitzgerald
"Maybe we need a war...it may be the last of the tonics."-- Norman Mailer, 1966
'Why of the sheep do you not learn peace?'
'Because I don't want you to shear my fleece.'-- An Answer To The Parson, William Blake