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Teen Titans Fan Fiction Winds of Fate: The X Factor (Teen Titans)

Discussion in 'The Story Board' started by Destiny_Smasher, Sep 20, 2004.

  1. Rae

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    Uh oh...The titans have been threatened and Starfire was caught on camera....and all this before they've even woken up yet

    That was cool, and i really liked Raven's attitude towards Robin, it was hilarious!

    Look forward to the next update

    Rae
     
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    Great morning, eh? Wonderful morning.

    Of course, the only one that knows about Star's weird transformation is Raven...

    Anyway, here's a few little pieces put right next to each other, just in case you don't piece them together:
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    She was blinded by a bright flash of white light—brief and intense, amplifying her headache. Shielding her face and squinting her eyes, she bent over, almost fell to her side from her dizziness, and scooped up the device that Slade had asked for. All the while, the flashes continued, and she cried out, “Please, stop,” with a whimper. Much to her relief, the bright light did, in fact, stop, for a few seconds, giving her time to limp away a few feet.
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    He quickly concluded from the evidence that the assailant had landed face-first, and their mask had shattered. He also knew that whoever they were, they had managed to take such a blow better than most would, and had already escaped. There wasn’t much of a point in trying for footprints without any equipment, as there were simply too many around. Noticing a shifty man in a trench-coat leaning against a streetlamp on the sidewalk behind him, Robin inquired the man, who was reviewing a small notepad in his hands.

    “Excuse me. Sir?”

    The oddball didn’t reveal his eyes, keeping them hidden from beneath his brown, tipped hat.

    “Did you see anything suspicious here a few minutes ago?”

    The man, who was puffing at a cigar, tapped some ashes of its tip and muttered, “It’s my job to see suspicious things, kid.”
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    Raven stared at the front page for a few moments with wide eyes, immediately captured by the headline: “Mutant Thief Outsmarts Titans.” She had quickly jumped from the words to the photograph printed below it, as that was the thing that really caught her attention.
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    So, maybe now those little things clicked togther, right? I hope? (For Din's sake, I hope so.)

    Anyway, did the beginning of this Chapter seem different? I mean, in the way it was presented. Like, did the styl feel different in any way? I'm trying to work on my writing style, since I've been reading my best friend's work, and it's friggin' GOOD, and I don't like that mine isn't as good as it could be.

    I need to work more on describing things besides exactly what's going on and what people are saying. I can't quite phrase it, but there's something missing, and I'm working on filling it in. That last update was a step in the direction I'm looking for, I think.
     
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  3. Rae

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    Yeah, as soo as you mentioned the flashing lights again, i put two and three together to get six...no...i mean five

    Anyway, yeah i did notice that the beginning was a bit different, but it's a good different!

    Rae
     
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    It should be even more different now. I just revised it, quite a bit, so please take another look at the THIRD version of that single scene, and tell me if it's even better than it was before.

    I think I like that style right there. I need to have my friend read it, so I can see what he thinks of it.
     
  5. Rae

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    That wass cool! I loved the sarcy bits with Batman and then all those things that Raven would never do, but had, it was hilarious!

    Rae
     
  6. Destiny_Smasher

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    :sweat: Thanks...Ehhh...Yea, so, you're about the only one reading this right now,clearly.

    Well, check it out. I'm paying one of my best friends to draw the 7 X-Factor Titans for me. This is the only fully finished one so far, and if it's any indication, they're gonna look sharp. 4 are already drawn, meaning there's 3 left to draw and 6 left to color. I'll post them up one by one as they get finished.

    Picture

    Yea, definitely happy, don't you think?
     
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    Sorry i havent replied in awhile.

    Nice chapters!!!!

    Nice pic of link, too.
     
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    sweet pic and great ch! wanted to let ya know of that, next time i drop by ill leave a longer post, gotta run somewhere but wanted to let a know that its a kick ass ch! and i like the pic!!
     
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    :sweat: Oh, uh, thanks. Yea, the pic is really nice, and I hope that my friend can get another one done soon.
     
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    Well, well. My friend finished another last night. This one has more flaws than the last one, but this picture is also more complicated.
    I shouldn't be complaining, anyway, since he's doing these for me, and I'm only paying him, like, $2 per pic. You can notice the cool texture he added to the skirt, to make it look like it was denim. If you look close, you can see the waves in the texture, too.

    Picture
     
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    Nice pic. yeah, I did notice some flaws, but the texture and posititon was really nice!:)
     
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    Yea, it's still pretty good, for sure.Can't wait to see how the final 3 turn out--they're not even drawn yet.
     
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    It's a shame there's no one around to read my new style, but...Oh, well.

    Que sera, sera, I guess.

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    Dead. Dark. Quiet. Frightfully quiet. That’s what the tower had been for some time, until Raven came tearing through walls like a missile, murmuring words inaudible to those around her. Upon hearing the conversation she had with herself, most would question her social skills and deem her unfit to live a ‘normal’ life. During the course of the thirty seconds it took the Titan to rocket herself from the front door of the tower to Starfire’s bedroom, she rambled to herself constantly. The word ‘no’ seemed to pop up dreadfully often in this exchange of dialogue. It wasn’t so much of an exchange of words—rather, it was a petrified release. The phrase ‘she wouldn’t’ was moaned rather often, as well, but ‘no’ was most definitely the favorite.



    “No…No, no, no…She wouldn’t…No. How could she? WHY? No, no, she WOULDN’T…”



    The words, packed with dissatisfaction, seemed to keep coming and coming, like an automated assembly line processing cheese. There was no thought put into them—they just came flying out with by bizarre, mechanical instinct as Raven struggled to rationalize the events that had transpired the day before. Clicking all the pieces together was incredibly difficult when some pieces were missing—making sense of the incomplete puzzle was even more tedious. Like a computer scanning for files that weren’t on its hard drive, Raven kept trying to explain to herself what had happened and why.



    Scanning drive for required files: System error.

    Scanning drive for required files: System error.

    Scanning drive for required files: System error.



    The process repeated itself a seemingly infinite number of times over those thirty seconds, which was quite feasible when taking into consideration the fact that the average brain can make millions of calculations within that time span. And then, in the instant when she reached Starfire’s door, everything finally froze up.



    File does not exist.



    It took a few seconds, but Raven managed to convince herself that there was an explanation—she just didn’t know everything yet. For all she knew, Starfire was still in her room. Yes, of course. How could she jump to conclusions like that? Starfire would still be in her room, craving love and support, and Raven would flood her with it forever and ever until everything was all better, and then they’d go have some Fairy Perry’s ice cream. Her mind deluded with fabricated hopes, Raven didn’t think to enter the door with her powers—she entered the access code as she remembered it: 07734. The cold, steel door slid open with the fluid grace of a toaster popping out toast, and Raven dashed in like a member of a SWAT team, inspecting every corner of the dark chamber with methodical movements.



    Opening Best_Friend.exe…



    The required data could not be found.

    This file appears to be damaged.

    System Error.



    The systematic search for life computed an end result: there was a .03 percent chance that Starfire was in the room. The .03 percent could be reached by taking into account the slight possibility of her body having been burned to ashes, thus serving as fertilizer for the potted Whapzar Ingerblot that was sitting on Starfire’s dresser. Though a horribly common breed of Ingerblot, the Whapzar was adorable, nonetheless, with its bitty little razor teeth and bloodshot eyeball. However, Raven concluded that the scenario of Starfire hiding within the potted soil of this plant was very, very unlikely, if not slightly questionable.



    Other rooms. She could be in another room. She could be ANYWHERE in the tower, and anywhere was a pretty big place to look. However, before her panic could fuel another search, there was something—a few somethings—on Starfire’s tidy, inviting bed that grabbed her attention, held it in a chokehold, then hogtied it and kicked it for good measure. A blue cloak, creased into a rectangle, a purple CD in a clear case, and a folded up square of paper with the word, ‘Raven’ scribbled in cursive upon its crinkled surface--these three items were each inspected with the care and curiosity of a scientist, though Raven hardly touched them. She didn’t need to even read the letter to have confirmation that Starfire was no longer residing in Titan Tower.



    It was at this moment that Raven’s core processor kind of sputtered and choked, and every little component of her reality was sucked into a standstill moment of tense silence. Programs were being shut down all over the place, until an abrupt message popped onto the computer screen of her brain. It read as follows:



    Flagrant System Error.

    Computer over.

    Virus = very yes.



    There was an unmeasured period of time—perhaps five seconds, perhaps five minutes—when Raven was oblivious to the world around her as she had her systems reboot. She found herself in a daze, sprawled over Starfire’s bed, her legs dangling over the edge. She moaned and sat up, regaining her bearings as quickly as possible.



    Describing exactly what went through her mind at that point would be very difficult, but could be summed up by explaining the throbbing pulses of anguish that coursed through her in waves, the jolts of guilt and self-hatred that steadily shocked her like a stun gun, and the frustration and regret that clung to every cranny of her frontal lobes.



    Fierce claws of desperation clutched her heart tightly, threatening to squeeze it like a balloon until it popped, but they were soon driven away by a little crow—a four-eyed, sinister-looking crow. This monstrosity was given good company as about thirty more of its feathered, red-eyed brethren erupted from Raven’s cerebellum. They began to prance all over her poor, battered brain, chanting like savage natives around a bonfire.



    Robin. Robin. Robin.



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  14. Destiny_Smasher

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    What up with this, man? You know how late I stayed up writing that last update?

    *sigh*

    Que sera, sera.

    Sonic is finished--but I can't seem to get him uploaded right now. I'll have a pic of him up soon...like, within the next few days soon...

    See, I have a job now.
     
  15. Destiny_Smasher

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    Yea, three posts in a row...?

    Anybody here anymore?

    Guess not. :sad:

    At any rate...Thanks to ImageShack yet again for hosting these, as well as any other pics I upload to the net...

    Picture


    Wow...That's uh, really big...No wonder I couldn't upload it before...(This is half the size of the original...)

    Well, whatever. How's he look? My friend insisted that he say that silly little quote, which is fine and good.

    I need to get him to draw the last three real soon...
     
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    Well, no one seems to be AROUND, but I DID happen to finish a scene last night, for what it's worth. If you check out the end of the last scene and the beginning of this one, you may notice a more unique transition that usual.

    Nothing big here, but trust me, it's coming.

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    “Robin…Robin! ROBIN!”



    A disinclining groan spilled from the young man’s mouth as he turned in his bed like a bear trying to hide from spring. His mind wasn’t awake enough to send the message to his arms to reach out and whack the metallic man who glowered down at him with dulled annoyance. However, Robin’s brain did make an attempt, which resulted in his arm flopping over the side of the bed and hanging limp afterward.



    “It’s eleven in the morning, Rob,” Cyborg grumbled, pinching Robin’s shoulder with his hand and mechanically lifting him onto his feet, a distasteful glaze over his eye. “Come on, man, get up.”



    Robin’s legs instinctively held him up in place, though this wasn’t saying much. His mind was as clear as tomato soup as his eyelids were gradually lifted up high enough to kind of make out the fuzzy Cyborg that towered over him. He attempted to speak, but nothing discernable came out. Whatever he had lazily pushed out of his lips, it hadn’t been words, that was for sure. Cyborg jolted the barely conscious boy, jerking him back and forth a few times by the shoulders. So much for him being the early bird…



    “Mmmeh?” he drooled out. It wasn’t translatable, but it was at least SOME kind of speech—a step in the right direction, if anything. Cyborg’s partially robotic mouth let a wholly human sigh of impatience spill into the rusty morning air of Robin’s bed room.



    “Yo, Robin,” he spoke, his tone as soft as concrete. “When you’re awake, come downstairs, a’ight?” There was a dim-witted pause, then a couple of slow, thoughtless blinks, and Cyborg threw in the towel. Tossing his arms in the air in a swift and apathetic motion, he groaned irritably.



    Leaving the Titan leader to his own devices (which were more like primitive tools than devices at the time), Cyborg exited the room with the same casual air that he had entered, and went straight down the hall to his own room. By now, he was sure that everyone was awake, besides Robin, of course.



    Although…Raven hadn’t been in her room when he checked. But, then again, there hadn’t been any signs of Star being in HER room, either. This wasn’t peculiar, really. Yea, Raven had probably managed to get Starfire out and had taken her off somewhere. At least Star hadn’t had to go through all of the crap from last night…Which reminded him: his main man Mario had some explaining to do. He had a LOT of explaining to do. The next thing he knew, that guy would be goin’ all ninja, doin’ all that ninjutsu crap—kung fu, duplicatin’ himself, doin’ that disappear-get-replaced-by-a-log thing…Where did he learn to do that stuff, anyway? Cyborg had a very funny feeling that Mario knew very well what was going on concerning his friends, and whatever it was, it was a lot bigger than Slade—it wasn’t natural.



    He opened the door to his room after sticking him palm to the sensor on the wall and sending in code through his fingertips. It slowly slid open, and he couldn’t help but yawn as she trudged in. His eyes opened just in the nick of time to detect the skinny little witch with pink hair whom he had almost yawned right into. She didn’t look terribly pleased, either. No, she was definitely bored, he could tell. There was a brief moment of silence as the door closed, and they stared at each other for a moment in a far from comfortable silence.



    “I’m going out today,” Jinx announced with bold nonchalance. She inspected her nails afterward, making sure they weren’t damaged in any way. She figured that she should probably ensure that her appearance as a whole was decent enough, because she wouldn’t want to go out in public without looking as good as she could. She was doing her best to look perfectly casual and in control, but Cyborg knew better. Jinx was bluffing her ass off—though he would compliment that it was a moderately cute ass, at that. The point of the matter was that she was hoping he’d help her get out and back in within being spotted. She had to get some air today, and being stuck in this room for a few days straight (aside from last night) had not been very fun. Oh, well, sure, she’d been escorted to the restroom during that period when need be, but that didn’t really count, now, did it?



    Cyborg had trouble holding back a hearty chuckle. Though her air was arrogant and calm, he knew that deep down, her remark wasn’t an announcement, but a plea. She wanted to leave the tower, but something—maybe his scanners picked it up, or maybe his intuition did—whispered to him that she wanted to come back in when she was done having her fun. Ah, what the hell? Couldn’t hurt, right? She was a cute little witch, and she had bared with him this far…She deserved some time to herself.



    Things would have to handled quite delicately, however—wouldn’t want Rob finding out about this. Ahhh—no. That’d be quite unpleasant. Hm…Better to get this out of the way now while it was early and the Titans were still lethargic.



    There were a few moments of awkward tranquility as Cyborg’s processors analyzed the situation, and Jinx could feel her intestines wrap around her stomach, squeezing it into submission. She had to get the hell out of this tower for a while, or she’d go insane. Moreover, she could feel queasy pulses of misfortune tingling through her body—her powers, which she had managed to keep under control for the past while, were itching to bring some bad luck to the world around her.



    “A’ight.”



    Wh--? That was all? What was the catch…?



    Jinx’s feline eyes narrowed at him, and she latched a hand on her hip, shifting her light weight a little to the side. Cyborg pitied those sharp, yellow eyes. They cut through his steel body and circuitry, piercing straight into his heart. They were resentful, doubtful, afraid…This girl had never known was true security was. There was always something that prevented it. Cyborg could only guess what factors would prevent her from knowing what safety was, but those eyes—those chilling retinas that questioned his integrity—they made sure he knew how much the girl really didn’t understand. She was a broken wretch of a woman, and Cyborg wanted to change that with every watt, volt, and ampere within him.



    “C’mon.”



    With that one word—clean, simple, and understanding in nature—Cyborg grabbed Jinx’s tiny, fragile hand in his goliath palm and dragged her out of the room. Giving the halls a quick check before he pulled her out, the bionic man made brisk steps toward the elevator at the end of the hall. Jinx gasped when a couple of small satellites of differing design cropped out of the broad, strong shoulders of titanium that supported his fierce, bold head. She found them to be rather adorable, spinning in happy little circles. Bleck. Where did THAT come from? But whether he was a robotic man or not, at least he was a big, strong…machismo-filled man...who had a sculpted face that drew her in—like a tuna to a fisherman’s net. She flopped and flapped, but no matter how hard she struggled, she couldn’t escape.



    There was something else about him that really turned her on: he was genuinely…nice. He actually cared about people, and it was hot with an extra ‘t.’ Ermm…Not that she was going to tell anyone that, of course.



    Besides, what the hell did she care if…HE cared? If he was going to be all nice and go out of his way to help her, risking his reputation and putting his loyalty on the line, going through so much trouble to sneak her out and in and such…why should she care, right? It was his choice, just as it was her choice to take advantage of it.



    Why, then, did she NOT want to take advantage of the situation? Urgh, stupid…What was the word? Conscience? That was close enough, anyway. Damnit, what was with this ‘conscience’ crap? She didn’t like it at first, but it wasn’t showing any signs of going away—it had already unpacked its bags, thrown its laundry in the washer, and put its clothes in the closet. This ‘conscience’ was here to stay, and she’d have to suck it up and deal.



    “When’re you comin’ back?”



    Hm? What? Oh, hey—fresh air! Holy ****, was that stuff so nice…



    Jinx couldn’t help but take a moment to suck the precious gases in. It had been some time since she’d tasted it. A hint of damp salt filled her nostrils as waves were pushed by the brisk wind, crashing into the shores and spraying their contents into the air—that tasty, irresistible air. Yum, yum.



    “Uhhhh…Yo, Jinx,” Cyborg tapped her bony little shoulder with a single finger—a chunky, sturdy finger.



    Jinx’s relief was jolted so much that it was scared back into the little hole it had crawled out of, and her attitude took the reigns again.



    “When did I say I was coming back?” she retorted with a spicy smirk.



    Cyborg kept his cool, immune to her sass. He knew fully well that she intended to return, as she had no where else to go. With a calm shrug, Cyborg turned his back and said to her, “All right. Guess we’ll meet up the next time you rob a jewelry store, an—”



    “Eight o’clock,” Jinx spat out in a rush as Cyborg opened the gigantic doors to his home.



    Cyborg glanced over his shoulder with his black, nonchalant eye. There was a pause, then: “’K. Whatever. See you then.”



    Sweeeeeeoooosshh. Gone.



    Part of Jinx didn’t want to leave that big ol’ ‘T.’ She was sure it would grow on her…Whoa, whoa, wait. What? Geh, she had to stop thinking like that. Titan Tower was NOT her home.



    But…as she stared up at it, and remembered all those things she had seen the night before…she realized that she wanted it to be.

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    Sorry, i've been away three weeks!

    Those pics were awesome, i congratulate your friend!

    Those updates were also awesome, i really liked the whole bit with Raven's mind being compared to a computer, it was interesting

    Rae
     
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    :yawn: Well, at least I hear from SOMONE, then. :shrug:

    I'm currently at my college campus (which really isn't big, since I came here all the time in the summer...) but right now, I'm officially a student.

    This basically means less time to write, so when I DO bother to write, it'll hopefully turn out decent.
     
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    *Looks at previous chapters* :eek: It might take a wile for me to catch up here....
    i haven't been around for a while (as you most likely noticed ^_^')




    :EDIT: Well, i guess it didn't take THAT long for me to read everything! ...just about 2 hours.... :sweat: Anyway, It's all coming along great!

    Red X. He wont show up as himself, he'll show up as Red X, right?

    Metal Mario is seriously cool as hell, i can't wait till we see more of him, and seeing Blackfire's more caring and sympathetic side is definitely a nice touch, it's nice to see she actually cares for Star. And all the moments with Jinx are really sweet. Touching. ;) sorry i can't say much more, but i kinda at a loss for words, but your a great writer, please don't ever quit- even if you dont get many reviews. (which, i dont seem to understand, why don't you get reviews?? you're story is great! maybe you scare people off with your serious replies :p )
     
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    Um...Wait, so, what the heck does that quote have to do with Red X?

    Anyway, the Red X will show up in this story, fairly soon, and be VERY important, AND you will know their identity when it all goes down.

    So, suffice it to say that it is someone that you WILL recognize--I guarantee it.

    Aaaaand...I've started my classes. AND I have 26 hours a week of work, or so. Soooo...Yeah, that'll be for the first few weeks of classes, so I can't say I'll be able to write much over the next few weeks.

    Hardly hearing from any of my readers on ANY of the sites I post my stuff up...Yea, doesn't quite give me motivation, either.

    But nice hearin' from ya. Hop eyou enjoyed it.
     

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