Sorry it's taken me so long to reply. Talk about a cliffhanger. You've always been brilliant at those.
Since I missed the past two updates(all of ACT I), these comments pertain to both parts. First of all, I gotta say that the set up for the fights was absolutely amazing. Adding the pictures with gave the fic a nice visceral touch, not to mention a nice reminder of exactly what characters you were talking about. The interactions between the characters in the first part were fun. Especially the rivalry between Starfire and Blackfire. I love that it's essentially the only time that Star gets incredibly mean. Also, it was fun seeing Raven get in on the competitive action. She gave a valiant effort at trying to remain neutral. Alas, the heat between her and Jinx showed a very different side to Raven. I loved it.
The fighting in general was really cool to read. Your descriptions seem to flow out with ease. One component you've always had in your back pocket when it comes to fights is tension. An example of this is Starfire's very brutal defeat. I was sorry for her, but a part of me being the way I am, I'm waiting to see just how badly damaged she really is. What makes this defeat so very unnerving, much to your credit, is that you've laid out your cards for us. You've created a danger to each of these matches because we don't truly know who is going to win. You know how to raise the stakes...
I want to say, though, nice job with Argent. She was a character that literally had(maybe?)two lines in the show, and here it actually seems like she's more than just a pretty face with an accent. Chesire, for a character that doesn't say anything, is really well done as well. She's evil, but she has got some style. This brings me back to my original point, which is, that cliffhanger. Terra has a chance of getting really, really messed up, to put it bluntly...and I eagerly wait to see if that is indeed what happens.
Keep it up, sir! I look forward to more!:anime:
PS: This is my 600th post!