Script: "Hungry Like The Wolf" (Warning: Language)

[Matthew Williams]

Okay... please excuse the crappy title. I couldn't think of anything and that old Duran Duran song was the first thing that hit my head.

anyway... this is a screenplay... well, the first 30 pages of it. It was for a class project but it's turned out so good that I'm goping to work on it, add to it over the summer, and have something for you guys.

But first, a warning... this one has some vague textual nmudity, and some language. Keep that in mind when ya read this.

anyway, thanks to the magic of the Internet, it's in HTML format so that it looks like a screenplay should. So I'm going to hyperlink this:

http://adultswim.toonzone.net/final.htm

It's in two parts. There's linking to each part so you don't have to worry about a big huge monster page showing up.

Feel free to comment or critique.

[Kylewayne]

Yay! You finally decided to post it finaly. I love the main characters and I must say...Ghost and Daken are my favorite so far. The human Jim though falls in love with her too quickly in my opinion making look like another cliché that all writers over use.

All in all, I like Ghost's personality the most (not to mention Daken's as well). The story is interesting and if you do not continue it I will have to persuade you to do so. After all, you are the reason for making me interested in the the rpg =P

Nice job Matt^^

[Singin' Stray Cat]

Nice. I can't really think of any grammar or structure complaints - the story itself seems pretty well-written (in other words, there's no place where I'm thinking, "Plothole!" )

The closest thing I can think of for criticism is that some of the characters seem a wiiiiiiiiddle bit stereotypical (Draken and Chris specifically come to mind). BUT, on the other hand, it's only the first couple of pages: there's still plenty of time for character development. Plus in general, I still like all the characters so far. It's not necessarily a bad thing. I've read, for example, fanfics in which I really had no idea who the characters were or what shows they were from - but the plot was so good, that didn't really matter. I think that's more like the case here.

Overall, I think you have a fantastic start here - let's see more!