Please comment: Doujinshi (Manga Fan Comic) Cover

[Steve Jester]

Ok, there's a reason why there's a link instead of picture. I don't want people complaining to me about putting nudity (very mild, with perfect positioning of hand, arms and wings) on to a TZ thread. this link (here) (http://thumbs.deviantart.com/300W-96A096/large/indyart/anime/Angelic_Destiny_1_Cover_BW.jpg) is a black and white version (excpet the title which is green). I'll be posting a colored version as soon as I get it done. I personally think it's one of my better pictures but I'd like people to comment on it.

the Doujinshi is called "Angellic Destiny" and it features Kari from Digimon. Should be fun to do. All pictures except for covers will be in BW.

EDIT: yes I did spell "Volume" wrong on the picture, will be fixed for the color one

[Steve Jester]

Ok, here (http://thumbs.deviantart.com/300W-96A096/large/indyart/anime/Angelic_Destiny_1_Cover_Color.jpg) is the colored version. Hope you like! :)

[Nightflower]

Is that a girl or a guy? Oh wait, it's a girl, it's Kari from Digimon.

Um........well, first of all, I think it would help if you worked on your girls, or at least make them more distinguishable. Even if she's young (I don't watch Digimon), you could give her a bit of a waist, give her some curves. The torso's a little long too. Her head's too big, and her arms and hands are too small. I'd change the cropping of the picture, or make the wings smaller, so that you can see them actually folding- it's not that clear that they are.

I realize that this isn't the workshop and this might not be what you want to hear, but I really think that this'll help you.

[Steve Jester]

or make the wings smaller, so that you can see them actually folding- it's not that clear that they are.


Actually, the way they are drawn, in my opinoin, the fold a little off screen (about a half inch based on my drawing style) and the small curve at the top on screen is the beginning of the fold.