Any thoughts?

[Thomas]

Hey there,

I have posted this to a couple other forums and have gotten some pretty good suggestions of things to improve and things that are done well. But I know the more the better in art so take a gander and let me know what you think of this art.

It was hand drawn and inked and colored entirely in Flash (except for the fuzz in the t.v.s) its gonna be a Flash based page to replace the current sketchbook page I have on my site now. You will able to view sketches and CGI images on the t.vs once its done and the fuzz will be animated as well as animated window shoppers too. I was trying for a late at night look of a street with a t.v. repair shop on the street. Let me know what you think and if you have any ideas about improving it if need be.


http://www.gutterflycomix.com/storewindow.jpg

[SilverKnight]

Wow, you drew that??

That is insanely cool! I wish I could draw backgrounds like that! Sheesh, that's incredible! Very well done! :)

[CryptiniteDemon]

That's an excellent drawing. Brings out a dark dingy feeling. I like it a lot. The tv fuzz really accents it and I like the use of shadows. I'd have to say the only problem I see with it is the sign in the middle. Kinda looks outta place. Oh well, great job!

[Thomas]

I have since added some content to the sign so it looks less out of place now. Ill add neon signs too once its all said and done. Ill post the final final version when its done. Thanx to all for the positive comments.

[James]

Excellent background. Like the colours too. You must be proud of that - the use of space and colour is very well executed!!

[Frozen]

That's extremely nice - a very striking image!

The only things I can suggest to improve this are, assuming it's meant to be a shop window:

You might want to put some form of sheen/reflection over the whole window (the TV's look like they're sat in front of the glass).

Be careful of the perspective on that shelf the TV's are sat on (the shelf itself has some attention paid to its perspective, but the TV's are dead flat on - you should be able to see the tops of the TV just as you can see the top of the shelf they are sat on)

There's an overall excellent use of draftmanship here, and, having never used Flash, I can only assume you've used paths to draw those lines - which might be why the edges of the sign hanging in the window aren't quite right. It looks like you stroked the same path with two different weights of line, and that made the top of your sign look marginally wider than the bottom (understand what I mean?)

Other than that, an excellent image - I hope we can look forward to seeing more of your work here at the drawing board! :)

[Barb Gordon]

My goodness, that is extremally kick ass! Can't think of any other way to put it at the moment. Majorly awesome job there. Detail is fantastic, even done to the static on the tvs. Wow. Really hope to be seeing more of you around here.

~Barb

[Outlander00]

I agree with Frozen on this... If you can get a layer over top of the console (I'm sure there is), then it will be perfect...

Strong image as well and looks perfect for a console. Excellent...