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darkangel93
10-13-2005, 01:17 PM
This is my first fic...im not very good at writing(according to my teachers) and would like constructive critisism(sp?) Anyway, this is a Raven fic and it does support the Rob/Rae romance. I will be continuing this if anyone is interested (3 good replies or more). Anyway, enjoy!
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CHAPTER 1
She woke up and looked around. Everything felt so dark and creepy, which was excellent, because that’s the way Raven liked it. She was the darkest of the Teen Titans, and the one they knew the least about.

Raven took the usual hot shower and got dressed. She then went downstairs, which was deserted because nobody had woken up yet. Knowing that Robin would wake up soon, she got her herbal tea quickly and sat down to read a book. This was one of the few times of day where she got peace and quiet.

Just as she was getting into the book, she heard a noise. Raven was pretty sure it was Robin doing his usual morning routine: shower, getting dressed, training, then breakfast. She was surprised, however, to see that it wasn’t Robin who walked through the entrance to lounge/kitchen, but it was Beast Boy. Beast Boy walked in, still tired, and made himself some tofu eggs. Pretty sure he hadn’t taken a shower, Raven tried to make a quick exit. Beast Boy, unfortunately spotted her and said “Hey Raven!”

Raven replied in her customary monotonous voice,” Hi.”

“Whatcha doing up this early? Do you want some eggs?”

“It’s normal for me to wake up this early. You on the other hand...what are you doing up this early? And no, I don’t want those tofu eggs.” Raven shuddered in disgust after sneaking a glance at the eggs.

Just trying to be nice but Miss Tofu Hater won’t allow that will she? Thought Beast Boy. “Just wanted to see what the tower was like when everyone’s asleep.”

Raven sensed there was something more behind this, but the smell of the tofu was empowering the room. “Whatever. I have to go meditate.” said Raven.

On her way out, Robin passed her. Smelling the tofu, he quickly turned around and caught up with Raven. “Hey.” he said. Hey? Wow, she is going to be super impressed with that! NOT!

“Hi.” said Raven showing no emotion. Even her eyes didn’t betray if she was actually interested.

Robin, trying to make small talk said, “I see Beast Boy is making tofu eggs. Again.”

Raven, still showing no emotion said, “Yes. I can’t talk right now, I have to meditate.”

“Oh. Okay. Well come out when your hungry. I’ll make some real food.”

“Thanks.”

Robin watched as Raven walked off into her room. He felt sad that she didn’t want to talk or anything. He thought to himself Well, I’ll get her next time. She’ll fall for my charm. Yea, I wish!

His thoughts strayed to Starfire. Yes, she was pretty and was always making him laugh but she wasn’t Raven. Raven was just so…mysterious. He liked that he didn’t know everything about her but still wanted to get to know her a little better.

MR.MXYZPTLK
10-13-2005, 01:25 PM
I agree with your Idea that robin would loike raven more there kinda simmilar. But there wasn't enough to judge on make a few more chapters and I'll say weather I liked it or not but judging by this it shows potential

keep writing

Death58
10-14-2005, 09:39 PM
I want to see you continue this please. . .this is something that I find interesting. Already I'm seeing underlying relationships. I like your writing so far, but I'll agree with scarehawk in saying that I would like to see some more scribings to review this a bit better.;) Please, more.

darkangel93
10-14-2005, 10:54 PM
1 more post :D ...i already have the plot in mind but im not sure if it has been done before :confused: . This chapter did minimal for the story, but it does do some stuff. Is anyone interested in editing my work?...im not good at catching mistakes and am not that good at writing :sad: ...PM me if your interested. (i know how to work that now!!! ;) :p :D ) By the way if you decide to edit for me, you will learn the plot before hand so if you dont want it spoiled, take that into consideration.

yea...cant get enough of the smileys!!! :) :anime: :D ;) :p :evil: :yawn: :cool:

P.S. thanks to scarehawk and death58 for leaving comments

percguy89
10-15-2005, 03:30 AM
sup dude,

i remember seeing u comment my fic, and i thought id return the favor.

uuuuum, honestly, there could b some minor tweaks grammar wise, however i grasp wut ur saying.

like the other two, id have to say that ill have to see the rest of the fic to see where this is going.

however, i like the idea, and im interested to see the rest of the fic.

but, i have to say sorry in advance, because i have a nasty habit of reading a few chapters of a fic, but then totally putting off reading the other chapters until later (which is usually after the fic is finished:sad::sweat:), but ill try my best.

peace out

Brent, The "Dude":cool:

Crowgirl
10-15-2005, 10:05 PM
I've got to agree with Perc here, there were a few things that could be tweaked to be better (grammar, descriptions, etc.) but this does look highyl promising. It's always nice to see a fic that denies the Starfire and Robin relationship... ;)

No Idea
10-17-2005, 06:07 AM
You shall continue! Other wise....It's T time foo'! And nobody wants that to happen do they?!


~Mr. Bad Boy~

Matt A
10-20-2005, 10:20 AM
Sure, this wasn't a piece of writing that blew my mind, but I've seen much, much worse from other newbies. Try to extrapolate on details a bit more, and you'll really be bloody good. No, I'm not kidding.:anime:

Like the others, I'm going to hold back on more detailed opinions until later on, when a proper plot is in place. Until then, it'll be interesting to see what else you can do with these characters: I'm not big on Rob/Rae or Rae/BB stuff, but I've yet to see either of them be depicted badly. Based on what you've done here, I doubt you'll be the one to fail where others have succeeded.;) :anime:

-Matt A-

PS: If you need an editor, give me a call.;)

Ravenfire666
10-23-2005, 08:16 PM
Wow great story I like the Raven and Robin idea it's all ways in the back of my mind. Those to being a couple so I think it's great your cahnging the pace of things. Keep up the good work:)