BB movie rough draft pt1. (very rough with a taste of Rebirth)

[Rahziel]

(epilogue::
Many years ago, Gotham
City was the harbor of many of the world’s greatest criminals, crime was at an all time high. The fate of the beloved city rested in the hands of one man, Batman. As his alter ego, Bruce Wayne, he used his vast fortune and learned skills to wage a one man war on those who terrorized Gotham City. Under the guise of the “dark knight”, he fought on for many years until many of his greatest enemies were to put to rest. Now, nearly four decades later, the need for a hero returns. Bruce Wayne, now to old for combat, finds the soul of a hero inside of a new Hero and now the reign of the caped crusader will begin again. The legend is reborn…)

(Intro)

(The first scene shows our hero in action within a holding.. Sticking to a wall in a distant corner, Batman uses the suit’s cutting edge technology to listen in on the conversation of two men far away…

voice from inside suit: what do you have so far?

Batman: Turn on your transmitter and vid link! Are you watching this? It’s Powers! He’s loading the nerve gas into that cargo ship!!

(the scene moves to inside a technically advanced cave .A grizzled old man sits at the large monitor of the super computer. He is accompanied by a large, black Great Dane…)

Old Man: I see him. Who is that other man?

Batman: (holding his right hand to his right ear; whispering) Him… he’s called Mr. Fixx, he killed my father! We’ve bee on their trail for the longest…(listens to more of their conversation…)

Powers: how long ‘til it’s done, Fixx ?

Mr. Fixx: These six vials are the last.

Batman: This is my one chance…

Old Man: You know what to do!

Batman: On it, boss! (dislodges from wall and spreads his red, glider wings. He takes off in Powers direction

Powers: And don’t forget to- (a batarang stakes the ground before his feet. He looks up to see Batman approaching from the sky) You!!! (pulls out a laser pistol and shoots at Batman; who dodges. Five guards emerge with laser guns. Batman dodges the assault and takes out one guard with a flying tackle. He lands with his back turned to the guards and his back by laser fire and is knocked unconscious.

Old Man: Are you okay? Answer me!!!

Mr. Fixx: sir, are you alright? (pulls Powers aboard)

Powers: (yelling) yes! Take off, now!!!

Mr. Fixx: but, sir..

Powers: Forget the rest, let’s go!!! (cargo hover lifts off. Powers operates com link and speaks to the guards on the ground) Make sure you kill him this time!!!

Guard*1: Copy! (he kneels down and turns Batman’s body over onto his back. He attempts to pry off the mask, but it won’t budge) Can’t get it off!!

Guard*2: Forget that!!! You heard the order! (all six crowd around him and aim their laser rifles at Batman. Batman opens his eyes quickly and with haste performs a windmill kick; knocking the guards back. Batman springs to his feet and commences to attack the guards, engaging in hand to hand combat. Batman connects on guard*2 with a left hook as he lets out a laser blast aimed at the air. Three guards fire at Batman constantly. Batman fire out a wrist batarang disarming them. He then attacks the guards; air split kick the two to the left and right , spins in the air and kicks the one in the middle before he lands. The remaining guard attempts to sneak attack Batman from his rear left with the butt of the rifle. Batman gives him a left backhand punch, knocking him out.

Batman: (looks up to see the cargo ship flying off into the distance) Not this time!!! (spreads glider wings and leaps into the air. The heels of his boots burst out flames of jet propulsion, launching him higher and faster into the sky; he follows the ship, gaining up
On the large craft. Batman reaches the wing, just as it seems the ship would pass him, he operates a claw finger mechanism in his gloves and latches on to the ship.)

Batman: (grunting) How do I get inside?

Old Man: (punches up the cargo ship’s schematics on a small screen) The main body area, in the middle!

Batman: (static electricity crackles from his hands and feet. He crawls to the hatch with ease as he clings to the surface. Batman sees the hatch and violently tears it off) I’m going in!!!! (leaps down into the ship)

Old Man: (monitoring Batman’s sights from the screen) The cockpit’s up ahead through that door. I shouldn’t have to say this, but…

Batman: (whispers) yeah, I know be careful!

Old Man: Good luck…(Vid link is cut off by the old man) …he’ll need it (speaking to his dog)

[Calhoun07]

Looks pretty cool, but remember that there is a fan fics board here where stories like this are better suited.

[Rahziel]

[QUOTE]Originally posted by calhoun07
[B]Looks pretty cool, but remember that there is a fan fics board here where stories like this are better suited.




I written that intro with the idea that "this is a movie, we all know who terry and Bruce, why go through REBIRTH all over again. Add a twist to it." i was thinking why not bring the new Batman in right away, then developing a little tension between our two stars to set off an expanation of Bruce's past and how terry came to become the New batman. i hope that when my intro's done , It'll set the pace to intro BLIGHT as the movie villian

[Salvor]

Not to sound mean but this does belong to the other board.

[Bird Boy]

that's cool. but I don't like the idea of changing the story of Rebirth. It should just start out as a regular adventure. But of the same thing you described above. none of father killing, fixx, or powers. they are gone..that's just my oppinion though... :)

-BB

[Rahziel]

[QUOTE]Originally posted by Bird_Boy
[B]that's cool. but I don't like the idea of changing the story of Rebirth. It should just start out as a regular adventure. But of the same thing you described above. none of father killing, fixx, or powers. they are gone..that's just my oppinion though... :)

I was thinking about changing Terry's father's death anyway to some other crime related situation not referring to Powers, do u have any concept on How Powers becomes Blight in a different way? I was thinking about writing his escape from Batman in the intro, than later in the film he has the chemical accident in his second encounter... Help me out, please?

[Rahziel]

Sorry about this, but this seems to be the only place the hardcore BB fans come, I just wanted it to be noticed... my apologies

[Bird Boy]

well, lets see...

How about...

Fixx doesn't kill Terry's Father, but Blight does. Terry just goes after Fixx to stop the shipment.

Powers becomes angry the next morning with one of his customers and kills Terry's father (or somthing like that). Then, Terry goes out as Batman (w/o bruce knowing), fills Powers air ducts with it, and then Powers is exposed to it.

How about that? Or am I just day-dreaming again? :rolleyes:

-BB

[James]

I written that intro with the idea that "this is a movie, we all know who terry and Bruce, why go through REBIRTH all over again. Add a twist to it." i was thinking why not bring the new Batman in right away, then developing a little tension between our two stars to set off an explanation of Bruce's past and how terry came to become the New batman. i hope that when my intro's done , It'll set the pace to intro BLIGHT as the movie villian

I think by bringing us into the film with the Wayne/McGinnis relationship partially formed would be a bad idea.

What makes a Batman Beyond film so potentially exciting is exploring the Wayne/McGinnis dynamic. While this may be a little of a retread over old ground, an origin story would be the more interesting and assessible idea for new watchers.

After all, you have a lot of people to convert. Not just the masses, but many hardcore Batman fans. Starting from the beginning is the way to make the film, if it's a success, then we get another!

I would also change the origin from the 'Rebirth' storyline and I would lose Powers - while an enjoyable presence to the cartoon, I don't think he would stand out on the movie scene. Perhaps someone new. I think the corporate stance has been done to death by Hollywood.

So who would make a good villain?

[Rahziel]

How about...

Fixx doesn't kill Terry's Father, but Blight does. Terry just goes after Fixx to stop the shipment



That would set the pace better. Fixx goes out the same way he did in the cartoon. I think the I would like to move the intro/credits 'til after Batman stops the cargo shipment. after the credits, how about Batman flying into the batcave revealing himsilf to the audience as Terry McGinnis. His dialogue with the "old Man" would reveal to the audience that he is Bruce Wayne. There, I'd write in material that would show how well the two characters compliment each other.

Powers becomes angry the next morning with one of his customers and kills Terry's father (or somthing like that). Then, Terry goes out as Batman (w/o bruce knowing), fills Powers air ducts with it, and then Powers is exposed to it.



Or... Derek Powers/Blight was responsible for sending Fixx to retrieve the chemicals he created at Wayne/Powers before his "mysterious dissapearance" (A freak accident that turned him to Blight. Bruce Wayne has retaken his company). No one knows yet that Blight and powers are one and the same. Terry and Bruce discover that the thefts in the company are Blights doing. When Batman saw what was being stolen, it sparks a series of detective work from the duo to uncover the mysteries behing the nerve gas and it's connection to the Wayne's corporation. Maybe that'll work...

[Rahziel]

I think by bringing us into the film with the Wayne/McGinnis relationship partially formed would be a bad idea.

What makes a Batman Beyond film so potentially exciting is exploring the Wayne/McGinnis dynamic. While this may be a little of a retread over old ground, an origin story would be the more interesting and assessible idea for new watchers.

After all, you have a lot of people to convert. Not just the masses, but many hardcore Batman fans. Starting from the beginning is the way to make the film, if it's a success, then we get another!

I would also change the origin from the 'Rebirth' storyline and I would lose Powers - while an enjoyable presence to the cartoon, I don't think he would stand out on the movie scene. Perhaps someone new. I think the corporate stance has been done to death by Hollywood.

So who would make a good villain?



I understand where you're coming from and I agree. It's tough writing about characters I haven't created! ( I specialize in making my own characters) I dropped the corporate villian approach with powers and made him a "ghost from the past" (read red post above). With so much input coming in, you guys have re-awakened my desire to write, thanks...

[Inque]

Originally posted by Rahziel


So who would make a good villain?


INQUE!

[Nightwing]

Originally posted by Rahziel

Just a small request about posting all fan fic stories on the fan fic board. That's what it's there for and all. Plus you can get some responses not only from hardcore BB fans, but from hardcore fanfic writers as well. Then you could have just posted a shameless plug here to tell readers to go to the fanfic board.

Anyhow, The entire relation with Terry/Powers is something I would not want to mess with. I wouldn't want the intense hatred they have for each other to be lessened any.

[James]

originally posted by nightwing
Anyhow, The entire relation with Terry/Powers is something I would not want to mess with. I wouldn't want the intense hatred they have for each other to be lessened any.

I agree - but would the corporate Powers be a little predictable (and perhaps a bit of a comedown from such 'krazy' villians from previous Batfilms) for a Hollywood film.

Small man vs corporation has been done before, and IMHO, I was none too keen with the Powers/Blight storyline. While it gave something to fuel Terry, it just reminded me too much of some of the mid 90's Luthor storylines in the Superman comics.

As for Inque, Inque , :) I wonder if another gooey CGI villian is what we need oozing across our screens...... at the same time, I can't think of anyone better.... (certainly not Shriek!).

Perhaps Spellbinder? Or is that venturing down the well worn Bat movie path of the OTT baddie?

[Nightwing]

Originally posted by SJJ


Small man vs corporation has been done before, and IMHO, I was none too keen with the Powers/Blight storyline. While it gave something to fuel Terry, it just reminded me too much of some of the mid 90's Luthor storylines in the Superman comics.

I wonder if another gooey CGI villian is what we need oozing across our screens...... at the same time, I can't think of anyone better.... (certainly not Shriek!).

Perhaps Spellbinder?


Possibly, but I would think Shriek is a better pick for a live action movie than Spellbinder. As far as the development race goes, Shriek has a bit more on Spellbinder does. But I'd drop them both for Inque any time if we're talking about the live action movie.

And I think the one man vs. a corporation thing could work, and has only been done so much because it influences better writing, in that it's not just a good and bad guy throwing punches at each other.

[James]

originally posted by Nightwing
Possibly, but I would think Shriek is a better pick for a live action movie than Spellbinder. As far as the development race goes, Shriek has a bit more on Spellbinder does. But I'd drop them both for Inque any time if we're talking about the live action movie.

Perhaps Shriek wouldn't be too bad... his character background is a bit dull, but the FX people could have some fun. I think Spellbinder would be better as it gives Batty a potentially more cerebral baddie. You could mess with the audience's head a little with Spellbinder - once again he'd have to be touched up a little as character wise he's pretty drab.

I've nothing against Inque (and enjoyed those episodes - and she's certainly a film worthy opponent) it's just I can imagine the cinema audience's apathetic sigh when they see another twisting bit of digital FX squirming onto the trailer.

It's not my lack of faith in any of these characters - I'm sure any one of them could do a good job - it's the lazy hollywood writing I'm worried about.......