Recent Poem

[Kury Wagner]

Well okay then... haven't written much in awhile, and I was beating myself up for it. But then, alas, I just started typing tonight, and I wrote a semi-good poem, I'd say. I'm not too happy with how turned out (especially since I decided to butcher it with rhyming), and it still needs some work, but don't yell at me too much, mkay? And yes, I realize "spoke on paper" is improper, but it just sounded too cool to get rid of... perhaps once I tweak the poem, it'll be changed. Dunno yet.


Well, those words he spoke on paper,
About some girl, and how he likes her,
Hurt me deep inside.
I felt like I just about died.
But I kept on living, and tried to move on.
I didn't dwell, and I hoped he was wrong,
About those feelings, about that girl,
About how he said she was greater than the world.

Then he wrote me again, with more news of this belle,
And I just about told him to simply go to hell.
But I read on, curious to what was new,
At the bottom he had written the words "I love you."
A smile, a tear-- both formed right then.
And I reread those letters he had sent me, again.
All this time, my envy was that of myself.
The girl he loved, the one I longed to be,
Was simply and utterly me.

[Squisheee]

That was really awesome Kury! You have as much talent in writing as Angel! Keep up that good writing! I am currently writing a poem, and it may make it up on here someday!

[HumanoidTyphoon]

I don't like the word utterly for whatever, so you lose points for that, but extra points for the use of belle. I don't see a problem with the rhyming.