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dimmy52
04-24-2005, 10:43 PM
Hey everyone. I have been posting in the 'World's Finest' board for a while now, and for those who go and visit, you may know my fanfic in progress 'The Raven and The Crow'. Anyway, I decided to have a shot at writing an original story. Anyway, here goes...

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Two thousand, three hundred and sixty one years ago, a legend was born. This young man would take the reins of his father’s crumbling empire at the tender age of twenty, and he would progress to become the greatest military strategist in the history of man-kind. History tells us of a blonde-haired, blue-eyed young man who fought with ruthlessness and deadly efficiency, of a man who would stop at nothing in achieving his goal. History also tells us of a benevolent man, wise beyond his years, who would help any soul he could in their time of need. History also tells us of a homosexual, or of a bisexual, a problem drinker, a wife-beater and many countless other depictions of the one who is recognized as Alexander The Great. One fact, however, is certain. He passed away due to reasons unknown, before his time as a military general was over. Now, his final resting place is unknown to all, but a select few who wish to keep such knowledge to themselves, for fear of desecration of the holy, or perhaps unholy, tomb of Alexander. Or so the story goes…



The night’s breeze was thick with fog as it rolled in over the distant Persian mountains, sinister in its presence. The fog blanketed the nearby camp, smothering its occupants and restricting their work. Many of the occupants were unaffected, however, as they had already laid their tools to rest along with their bodies and nodded off to dreams of their home and of the various minstrels that would be waiting and willing when they returned. A steady

“Tap, Tap” was heard as it pierced the damp air like an arrow. The perpetrator of the noise was naught but a man in his fifties, with receding grey hair and facial features that were polluted with crow’s feet and pockmarks. They mingled with one another to give the appearance of a man who knew so much, yet hungered for more. A pair of spectacles lay on his distinguished face, almost as old as the crooked nose it rested upon. He seemed oblivious to the lack of movement and the absence of sound, and beads of sweat had formed on his elongated forehead, furrowed and wrinkled in concentration. He was focused on his work, and he didn’t bother to stop and have a rest. Ever so slightly, he tapped his chisel with his hammer, creating a rhythm that evoked subconsciously; memories of a life lived long ago. The archaeologist buried these memories before they had a chance to impede on the work he has strived so far to achieve. He was enthralled in a world of his own, working to a tune of his own, a tune that had no words.
The delicate clay shell of the item the archaeologist was inspecting slowly crumbled, succumbing to the delicate taps of his chisel. The flakes of brown, speckled dirt fell through his calloused fingers, coming to rest in a small pyramid underneath his trembling hand. With increasing trepidation, the wizened archaeologist lifted his closed fist towards his spectacled eyes, his heart racing and creating a tune of its own. His fingers unfurled, and laying in the palm of his wrinkled hand was a gold medallion.

It was roughly circular in shape, with a foreign design on its face. With his other hand, the archaeologist turned the medallion on to its other side, examining it for anything that he may have missed. Seeing nothing of importance, he quickly pocketed it and stood up, his feet sliding on the loose dirt that he had been digging through only seconds before. With elation in his heart he almost skipped back to his tent, humming to a song once thought forgotten in his mind.

As he neared his tent, however, his ageing ears picked up a depressing melody, originating from the darkness and fog that enveloped the camp. He had never heard the song before, and it seemed foreign. Much like the design on his medallion. The archaeologist looked towards what he believed was the source of the melody, then back to his awfully appealing tent. With a sigh of resignation, he slowly walked into the darkness, following the noise.

He stumbled through the darkness, his arms extended in front of him in a desperate attempt to stop himself running into boulders on the plains of the Persian Gulf. With every stubbed toe, the archaeologist cursed himself at not bringing a torch. As he staggered blindly, the sorrowful melody that he had pursued when he left the camp had grown into mournful wailing and screaming. The archaeologist looked back to the campsite, which was now just a glow of soft yellow on the darkened horizon, and decided to return back. He had heard enough, he surmised, so he began his trek back to his tent.

Many steps and bruises later, he entered the outer perimeter of the camp. However, something was not right. As he surveyed his surroundings, he saw what only could be described as a battlefield. Tents lay ripped and slashed on the ground, with lanterns strewn all over, shattered. The one thing that frightened the old archaeologist the most, however, was the amount of blood that littered the area. It was all over the slashed tents, the broken lanterns and the upturned tables. His face drained of blood and turned white as he realized what had happened. With a cry of horror, he ran. He ran through the fog, through the darkness, tripping over large stones and rocks that littered his immediate path. All the while he had one hand in his pocket, making sure that he never lost the medallion he had spent so many years to find.

After running for what seemed hours, the archaeologist lowered his ageing body to the cold dirt below, his heart pounding and his chest heaving from exhaustion and fear. Ever so slowly, his eyelids grew heavy and he fell into a restless sleep, fearing the horrors that lurked in the dark.

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There you have it, the prologue. Hope you enjoyed, please review!

Youko Recca
04-24-2005, 11:30 PM
Welcome. I'd say for the beggining of your first(?) original here at Story Board, it was handled well. Sounds very much like the start of something I'd want to know the end of. Your protagonist I envision fitting in this setting perfectly aswell. Keep it coming.

dimmy52
04-24-2005, 11:38 PM
Thanks for the reply. This next chapter is a bit more light-hearted and funnier then the prologue. Without further ado, I present to you all, Chapter 1!

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The blistering Egyptian sun was raining its magnificent rays of light upon the inhabitants below, bathing them in glorious daylight and scorching the unfortunate few who were unlucky enough to not have worn any sun protection. The low slung yellow buildings that inhabited the poorer district of Cairo were extremely worn and weathered, their corners no longer as sharp as the day they were first erected, but rather mere smooth curves, rounding the rectangular shape they once were. Their flat roofs were wide and barren, and there were no guards or barriers to protect unwary tourists from a rather unpleasant drop into the crowded street below.

Michael may have been a foreigner to this country, but he was most definitely not a tourist. Donned in khaki green cargo shorts and an amazingly ugly Hawaiian shirt, he simply lay on his white deck chair, a pair of tinted red sunglasses that matched his shirt perched atop his slightly crooked nose. His curly black hair was extremely stubborn, and was more then willing to put up a fight when Michael’s comb grappled with it, so he simply subdued it with a plain black cap. The amount of hours he had spent in the sun had given Michael a healthy golden tan, or so he readily said. At the moment, however, Michael was simply relaxing; taking a well-earned break from the hardship he endured helping the archaeologists excavate their latest find at the foot of The Sphinx.

The archaeologist that first approached Michael with the proposition that a hidden chamber had indeed been found beneath The Sphinx was so excited he had been dribbling and frothing at the mouth, as Michael would put it. Of course, nothing was found. Nothing, except a small gold medallion, with an inscription that was foreign to Michael on one side, and completely blank on the other. He had pocketed this strange item, and had almost forgotten about it, until he felt a rather uncomfortable bulge as he sat himself down on the deck chair to rest. It now lay on the table beside him, next to his Frapé.

“Bloody scholars. Everything they say has to be right.” He said to himself with a slight smile as he reached for his cold drink. He brought the straw to his lips and took a sip.

“Wait, you don’t drink Martini’s through a straw! Something’s not right…” He asked himself as he inspected the drink in question closely.

“Michael Giorg-.” There was a moment of silence. “Giorg-ginas?”

Michael winced. He hated it when his name was pronounced wrong. He gritted his teeth and replied.

“If you’re not delivering my Martini, then you have five seconds. If you are, you have ten. Which is it?” He asked venomously, casting a look of hatred towards the figure beneath his crimson sunglasses. The look quickly melted away into awe, and then to male lust as he saw who had just addressed him. His gaze slowly traveled up her milky smooth legs, soaking in every curve until he was, almost unpleasantly, cut off by a pair of brown mini-shorts. He shrugged inwardly. This woman liked to tease. Either that or she was making do with the extremely hot weather. Michael knew it was the latter, but he wished it was the former.

“Maybe it’s both.” He thought hopefully. His gaze continued traveling upwards, coming across a bare midriff, before once again being cut off by a brown tank-top. His gaze eventually ended at her face. It was her face that stunned him the most and that was no easy feat. She had mesmerizing azure eyes, full of mystery and intrigue, an aura of adventure emanated from them, and Michael loved adventure. Her short, purple-black hair fell to her shoulders, and everything on her face was perfectly in proportion. He prayed a quick thanks to God for the sunglasses and proceeded to apologize.

“I’m sorry for the outburst, I’ve had a rough day, and I don’t enjoy having my name mispronounced.” He said with a friendly smile, but his eyes showed that he was still fairly ticked off. Luckily he was wearing sunglasses.

“I can imagine.” She replied simply. She stood there, not saying a word, and Michael’s anger at having been disturbed broke through her shield of beauty and his shield of lust, and he replied coldly.

“So… What do you want?”

“Can I sit? Or do I need a martini for that?” She asked, equally as cold.

“Well, this is the beginning of something beautiful, I can just tell.”

“Do you have a Martini?” Michael asked, almost hopefully. Her glare told him she didn’t, and with a sigh he spoke again.

“Sure sit down, make yourself comfortable. God knows this could just be the start of something beautiful.”

The woman pulled up another deck chair and sat down upon it. With a forced smile she replied.

“I was told that you are the best, now can you help me?”

“Perhaps you could help me first.” Michael replied. The woman raised an eyebrow skeptically. He took this as a sign to continue.

“Three simple questions.” He started, holding up three fingers. “What is your name?”

“My name isn’t im-.” Michael held up his hand.

“Simple question miss, just answer it.”

With a sigh, she gave in and replied.

“My name is Andrea. Andrea DeLarose.”

Michael smiled. “Ok Andy, next question.” Andrea flinched at the rather unwelcome name he had called her, but made no sound.

“How old are you?”

“I don’t see ho-.” Michael shrugged his shoulders and reached for his Frapé, still pondering on where his Martini could have gone.

“Mr. Giorginas, can you please stop with these childish games. There is a more pressing matter to attend to.” Michael didn’t reply for a moment, and then he slowly lifted his head and raised his crimson sunglasses, revealing a pair of dark brown eyes.

“You know, most of my clients are at least able to answer two of them before they become upset. No matter, it helps me judge their character.”

Andrea replied slowly through clenched teeth, the delicate contours and features of her face now wrinkled in frustration.

“Twenty-five.” She replied.

Michael smiled. “Last question Andy.”

“Andrea.”

“Yeah ok. Are you single?”

There was a rather unpleasant silence, enough to drown a fish, and then Andrea replied.

“Excuse me?”

Michael raised an eyebrow. “You’re excused, but you only just got here.”

Andrea grinded her teeth, her jaw clenched tightly in anger.

“Do you ask these questions to all your female clients?” She asked slowly.

“No.” Michael replied casually, taking another sip of his drink that he wished was a Martini.

“So why are-.”

“I ask them to all my clients, male or female.”

“Why?”

Michael shrugged. “It’s amazing how easily you can tell what you can uncover a person’s true personality through these three questions.”

“I think this is a pointless waste of time.” She replied in a huff.

“Andy-.”

“Andrea.”

“Just answer the question.”

Andrea was stunned at his relaxed disposition. He seemed almost detached.

With a sigh of resignation, she replied.

“Single.”

Michael was amazed. It had worked. His interrogation had actually worked. The other night, when he was in a local bar having a couple of beers and slowly getting drunk, he made good friends with a certain individual. They had chatted for hours, until the topic of work came up, to which Michael abruptly replied “Dry-Cleaning.”

As they were discussing the meaning of life and if there is alien life in the universe, as you normally do when drunk, his friend mentioned something about a tried and true line that immediately told you whether a woman was interested in you or not. The principle was simple. State the fact that you were going to ask her three simple questions, then ask whatever you want, but the last question must always be “are you single?”

If she replied yes, then it was assumed that she was interested. If she said no, then she is either not interested, or simply telling the truth. Apparently it was foolproof, and Michael had been eager to test it.

To this day he is still unsure as to how he managed to remember that line, but not his friend’s name or number. He would very much like to catch up again.

With a sly grin, he replied.

“Was that so hard Andy?”

“Andrea.”

“So what did you want to talk to me about?” Michael continued, blatantly ignoring her correction for the second time.

Andrea produced a newspaper from her bag and handed it to Michael. The headlines read:

Ten Thousand Tomatoes missing. Farmers perplexed.

Michael was confused.

“This happened three nights ago. My…My father was one of them.” Andrea’s upper lip quivered, and she tried hard to contain her emotions.

Michael’s brow furrowed. He looked at Andrea, then back at the headline. He stared at it, looked back once more at Andrea and he blinked.

“It was horrible. There were no survivors.” Andrea started once more, choking back her tears. The event was just too much of an emotional burden upon her, and she was having trouble keeping her face clear from tears.

Michael was still confused. He looked back at the newspaper. It still mentioned the missing tomatoes. Perhaps he was missing something. He was unsure.

“Before he… died. He found an amulet. It was a strange amulet; no-one knew where it came from or what it meant.” She continued, her cold exterior now rapidly breaking away at the news of her lost father.

Michael glanced quickly at the amulet that he found and pocketed whilst helping the archaeologists.

“He-.” Michael cut her off with a raised hand.

“Let me get this straight, because I’m confused.” He wasn’t lying.

“Your father…” He began, watching her for any reaction.

“Yeah…” She replied, equally as perplexed.

“…was a tomato…” This is what confused him.

“Yeah…” Andrea’s mind wandered back to memories of her father, and of how he grew from… Wait.

“Wait, no! What the Hell?” She snapped back to reality, now more confused then when she left.

Michael handed her the newspaper, and Andrea glanced at the front page. With a slight blush, she flicked the page over and pointed to the right article. It read:

Massacre in the Persian gulf. Supernatural creatures slaughter archaeologists.

“That’s more like it-oh…” Realization set upon him, and with a pang of guilt, he finally understood. She had lost her father abruptly and brutally, and here he was making fun at her expense. He cursed his conscience and replied.

“I’m… Sorry to hear that. If I knew I would not-.” Andrea turned away, cutting Michael off and she stood up.

“That’s not the point. The amulet my father found, I think it had something to do with it. With the attack.”

Michael glanced once more at the amulet, and with a sigh he snatched it from the table next to his imaginary Martini and stood up as well.

“Did it look like this?” Michael asked, holding up the amulet and letting it glint in the sun. Andrea’s eyes widened in horror, and she stumbled backwards, knocking over her chair.

“What’s the matter? It’s just an amulet.” He said calmly, but in reality he was slightly confused at her sudden reaction.

“W-Where did you find that?” She stammered, taking another step backwards.

He pointed towards the Pyramids of Giza in the distance.

“Around there somewhere.” He replied vaguely.

Andrea followed his finger, and with a silent cry she grabbed her bag and proceeded to leave the roof.

“Yeah that’s fine. Goodbye.” Michael said sarcastically. He received no reply from her retreating back, and with a final shrug he lowered himself down on his deckchair.

“This was an interesting encounter… she’s hot, but she’s disturbed. One second she’s a cold bi**h, the next she’s all emotional, and now she just leaves as if the hounds of Hades are after her. Oh well… Must be one of those days. It’s too hot to think.”

With a final glance at the amulet, he tossed it aside and grabbed his Frapé, slurping it and silently wishing it was a Martini.

Faethie
04-25-2005, 02:41 PM
whoa whoa WHOA WHOA!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

This is very cool Dim! VERY COOL!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!:D

Matt A
04-25-2005, 06:47 PM
Okay, so what do we have here? A prologue dripping with suspence and mystery (not to mention a lot of blood...), quickly countered with a first chapter that nearly had me rolling on the floor with laughter, and both are part of a plot that may well involve lots of groovy but all-too-rare Indiana Jones-type adventuring stuff. If you can keep this up, then you may well become a legend...:anime: :anime: :anime:

I might as well mention this specific point now:


Michael handed her the newspaper, and Andrea glanced at the front page. With a slight blush, she flicked the page over and pointed to the right article. It read:

Massacre in the Persian gulf. Supernatural creatures slaughter archaeologists.
If that isn't the single funniest punchline of the year, then I don't know what is!

Ta,
Matt A

dimmy52
04-26-2005, 02:50 AM
Thanks everyone. It might be a while until I get around updating it, so bear with me. I will most likely update my sig as well as the chapter, so you can be notified of it there.

Cheers, Dimmy52.