Make my Heart soar

[Dee]

HI!! PLZ TELL ME WHAT YOU THINK ABOUT MY FANFICTION

I HAVE IT AT MY LJ BUT I WILL POST HERE FOR YOU!!


The autumn sun sparkled in the clear blue sky. It was a golden shade of amber. Inside the halls at Hogwarts, students passed through the halls to their studies. The footsteps could be heard on the stone floors.

Ron and Harry spoke of their plans for the weekend. Ron looked up as he heard something--- something that stood out of the crowd. Harry followed the direction of Ron’s eyes to a figure coming down the hallway. Through the crowd of students came a stunning figure. Harry blinked, thinking it was nothing less than an angel. Her robes fluttered behind her and she gently tossed her silky silver-blonde hair over her shoulder. It came down past her waist. Each strand glittered like silver gold in the sunlight. Ron’s eyes followed her as she passed. Harry waved his hand infront of Ron’s face.
“Are you awake?” Harry asked.
“That’s what she looks like….” Ron mumbled.
“Who?” asked Harry as he raised an eyebrow.
“Hermione told me about her. She’s the transfer.” Grinned Ron.
“Part of me says Hermione had a different response to this transfer.” Suggested Harry.
“She growled angrily when she found out she had to show her around… but I think it’s just great.” He responded with a smile.
“And who is she?” asked Harry as he tipped his head.
“Who is who?” responded Ron who was entranced by the girl’s hair.
“The transfer!” said Harry.
“Her name is Gwen….” Said Ron.
“Is that All?”
“Gwen… Quinne? I believe it was that. Hermione would know.” He said.
“Well, theres no better way to find out than to introduce myself.” Said Harry. He brushed past Ron and followed the transfer through the crowd of students. Ron snapped out of his daze and followed behind.

“Excuse me--- I don’t believe we’ve met.” Said Harry as he stuck his hand out.
“Oh--- hello---“ said the girl.
“I’m Harry and here is my friend Ron.” Continued Harry. Ron swiftly took the girl’s hand and shook it.
“HI!” he squeaked.
“Hi… again.” She smiled slightly.
“Soooo……” began Ron. Harry sighed.
“I believe I have an appointment right now, but I shall meet you again at dinner?” she suggested.
“That would be good.” Said Harry as Ron nodded endlessly.
“Bye---“ she said.
“Before I forget--- what’s your name?” asked Harry. The girl smiled. Her lips were a soft pink the color of pink roses opening with dew on a spring morn.
“Oh yes… it’s Gwen…. Gwen Quinne.” She said. Ron repeated the name over and over and Harry could only shake his head.

[Dee]

Anyone????

[Dee]

comeon people:anime:

[Dee]

CHAPTER 2!!!!Hermione narrowed her eyes at the striking transfer student not too far from her at the table. Something was unsettling about her. She just about hated her, but at the same time, was mesmerized by her crystal amethyst eyes and her silvery gold hair. The candlelight danced across her crystal amethyst eyes and almost hypnotized.
“So… tell us a little about yourself.” Suggested Ron.
“I come from a city called delarpious. It means for “pristine empire of the sky.” She said.
“And I bet you come from a long line of wizards and witches.” Scoffed Hermione.
“Actually no….” began Gwen. “I’m purely muggle but when I was born, there was a long, dark eclipse. It began a chain reaction of bad fortune. There were earthquakes and most of the city was destroyed. My parents were killed in the earthquake, but I survived. I was raised by a family of scholars.”
“And exactly how are you here?” asked Hermione with a glare.
“On the eighth day of the eighth month of my eighth year, at eight o’ eight in the morning, I fell ill to a strange malady. Eight days later, It disappeared and my powers began to manifest.” She said.
“that’s so….” Began Harry.
“Tragic?” suggested Gwen. “I can read your thoughts.” She continued. “Actually, once I touch you, I can focus my thought and read the thoughts of most any person I’ve ever come in contact with.” She finished.

The next day, the sound of Gwen’s black mary janes could be heard coming down the hall. She eventually found her way to her class--- Potions with Professor Snape. Gwen entered through the door and immediately her presence commanded attention. No one could escape the enigma that was Gwen Quinne. Not even Professor Snape.

[Dee]

*CRY!!!!!* NO ONE READ IT!!!!!!!!!!!!!

[MahouShoujo13]

It's okay...

But I have two words: MARY SUE.

[Dee]

It's okay...

But I have two words: MARY SUE.OMG U TAK THAT BACK!!!!!11!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

my name is gwen!!! not mary!!!!!!!!!

[J. B. Warner]

Surely this is some elaborate April Fool's joke.

[Jave]

Surely this is some elaborate April Fool's joke.NO! REALLY??!!!

[Dee]

Surely this is some elaborate April Fool's joke.
why is everyone so mean to mee?? i just want 2 know if you like my fic!


:crying: :crying: :crying: :crying: :crying:

[Dee]

NO! REALLY??!!!
*cry***:crying: :crying: :crying: :crying:

[MahouShoujo13]

OMG U TAK THAT BACK!!!!!11!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

my name is gwen!!! not mary!!!!!!!!!

You're a fanfiction writer...and you don't know what a Mary Sue is.

I'm not going to waste my time to tell you what a Mary Sue is. Ask someone around here.

[Kury Wagner]

You're a fanfiction writer...and you don't know what a Mary Sue is.

I'm not going to waste my time to tell you what a Mary Sue is. Ask someone around here.Oh geez.... please, look at a calendar before posting anything else on TZ today.

[Dee]

You're a fanfiction writer...and you don't know what a Mary Sue is.

I'm not going to waste my time to tell you what a Mary Sue is. Ask someone around here.
it s not a person>??

because my name is gwen. not mary.

[Dee]

Oh geez.... please, look at a calendar before posting anything else on TZ today.lololozzzzz no but have u seen my LJ?? i have my fic up there too!

[MahouShoujo13]

Oh geez.... please, look at a calendar before posting anything else on TZ today.
Oh.

Okay...I think this is some sort of stupid prank. How could that girl be a mod? :confused:

[Dee]

Oh.

Okay...I think this is some sort of stupid prank. How could that girl be a mod? :confused:
THATS TEH BEST PART! THE MADE MEE A MOD FOR THE DAY!11!!!

bettah watch hyour self i might modrate!!!

[Kury Wagner]

I think you should be Princess Toon Zone, DarkSnapeGurl16.

[Dee]

I think you should be Princess Toon Zone, DarkSnapeGurl16.

IM A WITCH


SNAPE IS HAWT

:anime: :anime: :anime: :anime: :anime: :anime: :anime: :anime: :anime: :anime:

[Beguiled]

SNAPE IS HAWT

:anime: :anime: :anime: :anime: :anime: :anime: :anime: :anime: :anime: :anime:
pleez, snape is ugly & old & smelli.

ORLANDO'S TEH HAWTEST!!!!!

[Beguiled]

btw ur fanfic is ok i gues..

[Fone Bone]

Don't keep me in suspense! What happens next?

[J. B. Warner]

I really picked the wrong time to post a fanfic with actual substance. This one's getting all the attention instead.

[Dee]

almost donw WITH CHAPT 3

[Dee]

YAY! ENDING! sad though
:crying: :crying: :crying: :crying: :crying: :crying:


Snape raised an eyebrow as the slender figure walked in.
“Good day.” He said with a slight smirk.
“I presume you are Professor Snape… head of Slytherin. I arrived yester morrow.”
“Indeed. I believe you are Miss Quinne.”
“You believe correctly.” She said as she shook his hand.
“I’ve not heard much about you. The sorting hat’s placement of you here in Hogwarts will be the only indication I have until you take a place among your fellow students.”
“I hope to excel in the class.” She said.
“Have no hopes. Success in anything must be earned.” He said as he returned to his work.

The next day in class, Gwen was introduced to a young headstrong student named Draco.
“Just try and keep up.” He said with a grim tone. “And don’t get yourself in trouble. I’m not going to help you.”
“I can help myself.” She replied.
“Alright, if you two are so sure of yourselves to ignore the professor’s lecture, let’s see how you can take care of this.” Said Snape as he glared at the two students.
Snape presented them with a potion.
“Identify this.” Said Snape.
“It’s easy…” said Draco as he took a look at the bottle. “It’s---“ he paused. He caught a smell of the aroma. “It’s a Babbling Beverage.” He said with confidence.
“And is that your answer?” asked Snape.
“Yes--- yes it is, professor.” Said Draco.
“And does Miss Quinne have confidence in your decision?” he asked.
“Yes—she does…” said Draco.
“No, I don’t.” said Gwen.
“And why is that miss Quinne?” asked Snape.
“Because it’s a Confusing concoction.” She said.
“It is not.” Said Draco.
“Yes--- it IS.” She said. “You inhaled the vapors and became confused. Because there are no other symptoms, it indicates that it’s a Confusing Concoction.” She said. Snape looked at Draco.
There was a pause.
“You’ll make Slytherin House impress the rest of the student body yet, Miss Quinne.” Said Snape. “It’s not a Babbling Beverage.” Said Snape. Draco glared at Gwen.
“Stupid muggle….” Said Draco under his breath.
“Mr. Malfoy--- accept defeat with grace. Without that, you cannot learn from your peers.” He said. Another moment of silence ensued but was interrupted by the sound of an explosion.

Outside in the courtyard, a Peruvian Vipertooth Dragon was loose and it tore through one of the walls.
“Everyone stand clear!” yelled someone. A wall of fire tore through the air.
Gwen stepped forward. She took her wand and raised it.
“INCARCERCEROUS!” she yelled. Ropes appeared from thin air but wewre destroyed by the dragon. Gwenn attempted the spell again but in a split second, the dragon lept forward and with one strike, it hit her. She landed on the lawn as the dragon took flight.

Snape hurried to her side.
“I… was out of line.” Said Gwen.
“NOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!!!!!!!!!” yelled Ron. He tried to run to her but was stopped by the crowd of onlookers.
Snape took note of a large gash in the student’s shoulder. It was cut by the dragon’s talon.
“Just don’t do anything foolhardy again.” Said Snape.
“I wont get that chance again---“ she said as her eyes met his.
“It’s just a scratch.” He said.
“I know--- I know what you’re thinking. I can read your thoughts---“ she said. “One day our hearts will meet again. Until that day… you/ve made my heart soar.” She finished. A moment later, she died. The sky grew dark and rain began to fall. The somber mood of the sky was a reflection of everyone’s feelings.

[guinaevere]

Yay! I love it when characters named Gwen who dig Severus die!

[Dee]

It had to be... it is the law of the Mary Sue.

[Zach]

pleez, snape is ugly & old & smelli.

ORLANDO'S TEH HAWTEST!!!!!
YOUR KILLING ME OVER HER!!! I HEAR HEAR ENOUGH ABOUT ORLANDO AT SCHOOL, NOW I HAVE TO LISTEN TO IT HER AT TOON ZONE!

[Dee]

It was all just an April Fools joke.