Setting out into The Twilight Seas

[Neko Konneko]

I am writting a story off a comic bookI am writting so it'll probably be a little strange, so I hope you like it!!!!!

Subchapter 1: This Ship Sucks!!!

I walked a long hall to a room that said: "Caution, Ship Repair white permit required". I waved my newly laminated white permit under the light. The doors opened and as I walked in it said "Keina Sujae entering". It was dead silent. A horrible trashed ship lay in pieces on the ground.My dead sister walked in as a ghost.
"So, keina this is the ship?" She stated bluntly.
"Well, yeah I guess... it's in pretty crappy condition." I said
"Wait a minute wasn't it supposed to be fixed by now?" My sister said as I stared blankly at Haku the ship.
"oh s**t. Oh s**t. Oh fu**ing s**t!!!! Oh yeah that's a great way for a newcomer to be known! Well, thanks for reminding me Iria!!!" I yelled running around in circles franticly.
"Well Mabye it wouldn't kill ya to be a little more responsible keina!"
" goddam* it Iria dont yell!" I yelled at her ghostly face.
" You can't talk stupid-head! You're yellin a whole lot more than I am!" Iria yelled at my human face.
"Excuse me can I-" I turned around and saw that I had hit someone right on the face. She was very tall and in a sailor schoolgirl uniform.
"Oh, oh my! I am so sorry, miss!" I said to the tall one. I also turned my head and glared at my annoying sister.
"whaaaaatttt? I didn't do nothin' so don't friken' look at me in that tone of voice!" Iria yelled again
"the name's Saquoia. I help here, ssooo can I be of assistance?"
"I like your hair" Iria stated very randomly.
"It's much nicer and longer than Keina's." Iria said.
"ya know Iria, not everyone can see the dead,"
So... Point?" Iria said rolling her eyes.
"So it's still an insult to me." I said bluntly.
"OOhhh! Yeah whatever mabye."
"Uh, I am stil here you know. And I can see ghosts"
"Oh sorry, but yeah we do need help." I told her.
I'll be back" Saquoia said.
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I hope you liked this fragment of my story!!! Please reply !!! This is my first story on here!!!

[Neko Konneko]

waaaaaa no replies..... :crying:

[cross blues]

is that your own personality in those characters or is your imagination that good? there's lots of energy in it, like you were hyper when you wrote it or something. don't worry, that's a compliment. I like it. post more?

[DarkAngel]

I hope you liked this fragment of my story!!! Please reply !!! This is my first story on here!!!Interesting, Neko. Maybe you could incorporate some descriptive passages to give a better sense of the surroundings/setting. If you post more, I'll definitely read it. I'm curious as to where this takes place and what exactly is happening.

[Neko Konneko]

is that your own personality in those characters or is your imagination that good? there's lots of energy in it, like you were hyper when you wrote it or something. don't worry, that's a compliment. I like it. post more? Yea that is a lot of both. I drank too much coffee that day... thank you i will keep posting!!:anime:

[Neko Konneko]

Saquoia ran out of the ship matnence room as the big silver doors opened like they opened just for her and closed fast and sharp. I looked at Iria and she looked at me both of us more puzzled than when she first came.
"What just happened Keina? Keina? Keina? KEINA!!!!???? Earth to Keina!!!!"
"Shut up Iria! I am trying to process what just happened so keep your mouth shut for just one measly minute. okay."
" Iria, stop waving your ghostly hand in front of my face" I acted like I was slapping her hand away.
"Fine, fine, fine. But Iwonder what conditioner she uses? Cause I'd be really good for your short ratty hair, Keina." Iria stated while she withdrew her hand from the air in front of my face.
"Is every day 'Insult Keina Day' Because if it is every day gonna be 'Make fun of Dead sis day' for me. And anyways I NEED my hair to be this short. Having your hair a little above your chin is'nt that short." I told her.
" Well geez you told me..." Iria stated.
I decided to look around at this ship. It was in horrable condition. It's cockpit was completly destroyed. Pieces of the metal from the wings were chared black and lying on the floor. The bottom of it loked like it had taken a
hard landing without wheels, or whatever was inside this ship. The skid marks were possibly longer than me and they were everywhere. I had never seen a ship this bad ever, even at the military avation center nearby where I lived.
The technology didn't look that old. My guess it was a fairly good ship. I looked at the bottom and saw that it was curved downward, similar to a water ship. But, that would look weird to see a see-bearing ship with wings. Wait, "the fly-base". The "Fly-base" was a in-developing all-terrain secert
warcraft they were making at the avation center. I was pretty well-known there. I helped build it. I am sure. I am sure this is a "Fly-base". Mabye that's why I got called up here...

[Tzomisx]

Very interesting so far, very surreal feeling to it. You may want to give more details on this ship they are on - I'll keep my eye on this

[Neko Konneko]

A big huge thankx to those who have repied I will keep postingI have to work on my comic though. :anime: And tho those who have read but have not bothered to reply, shame on you!!! :mad: And if you wondered y this story isn't very detailed it'sbecause my comic isn't very detailed, but I am trying my best!!! Well, anys I will keep posting!! Thanx again!!!!

-neko
-aka Television!

[cross blues]

I am writting a story off a comic bookI am writting so it'll probably be a little strange, so I hope you like it!!!!!
I'm confused. is this story what the comic book will be based on? if so, that would mean you wrote the dialogue with pictures in mind, and are just adding verbal descriptions of those mental pictures so we know what you're talking about... right? :confused:

[Neko Konneko]

The story i s based off the comic, but I am father in this story so they just counteract with each other. does that make sense??

[Kylewayne]

I must say you are very energetic in your writing. Just try to give a bit more personality to your characters and a bit of a setting in your story. I like what I read so far so please keep up the good work. I am curious to see where this story is heading =D

[Neko Konneko]

thanx for all the encouragment I wont be on for about a week cause I am on spring break vacation. When I get back I should have a lot more done. So until then.

Television

[Neko Konneko]

sorry. I lost my comic. It has been the basis for my Ideas. But don't worry! I just need a few days to get rid of this writter's block. I'll still post on this story. I am also working on Angelic Bliss: the demonic era so if you want to read that for now go ahead!!

[Neko Konneko]

Found my comic finally!! I was sitting in my cello case...what a great place for it! Sooooooooooo I'll start posting again!! I hope noone has lst intrest.
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" I really don't know where to start. This ship is in horrendus condition. Mabye I'll-"

"Hi!!! Down here!!" Two little girls, one very energetic were tugging at my pants.

"My name's Melanie. I am chef. And that's Chi. "

" Hi Chi, Melanie. So... um how old are you too? I am sixteen."

"I am Twelve. And Chi is thirteen. In therory we are twins I was born at 11:54 pm and she was born at 12:01 am." Melanie told me. I quich bolted a glare that said dn't say anything yet at Iria. She looked angry but understood why.

"hi, I see you've met my cousins." Saquoia walked in with her hair up and out of her school uniform. "Chi have you said hi yet?"

"..." Chi turned and stared at Saquoia.

"Guess not. Well, they're polar opposites anyway. So where do we start on this ship, Keina" Saquoia asked me. I was totally oblivious for a few moments.

"We don't."

What do you mean?" Saquoia stared at me with a puzzled look.

"I mean we're taking the good pieces of metal from the old ship and making a completly now one."

"Oh okay"
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So to be honest when I drew this part I said that they worked long hard hours an dthen they were done. I really don't know how to discribe that so if this is fine then thats good cause I wont be able to describe it.