The war between us (PG-13)

[Raven13]

I’m new here at the story board so if I’m doing anything wrong just point it out to me. This is the place were I can just post stories isn’t it? Well here is my first fan fiction here!:D







Prologue





Dressed in black she walked up the small hill. It was a beautiful spring day, and the flowers were in bloom. However inside the mind of this woman’s head it was not a wonderful day. For this day brought back memories of the past and the happy days of when she was young.



When she got to the top of the hill, there was a grave stone. It was standing alone with nothing surrounding it but the small flowers that grew around it. She then knelt down near this grave stone and rung her hands around it. She then burst out into tears and still hung tight to the grave stone.



She then loosened her grip and then set a flower next to the writing on it. It had read, 1743-1766. Whipping away her tears she then took in a deep breath and let all of her sadness out with a deep sigh. The woman than laid down on the ground.



“Why did I let you go.” The woman then mumbled. “So many years ago, why did I ever let you leave?”



She then closed her eyes and went back in her mind…30 years ago.






Well I do know that is is very short but the other chapters will be longer!:) Please reply if you liked it!!!!! :shrug: Well this chapter was not so great but the story will be a lot better. I want to know if I should continue to write it!



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[Raven13]

If no one replys within the next 5 days you may shut this thread down, becuase it looks as if no one will reply!:o (It is Thursday today)

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[Tobias]

Looks interesting so far, but I need to see more to form a more proper opinion.

FYI, don't get discouraged if no one posts feedback right away, or the first week. This is a very, very, VERY low traffic board currently.

[Raven13]

O yea i figued that out this is a VERY low borad! Well I think you will learn more soon!

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[Raven37]

That was pretty good. Even though you only have about 2 fans for it right now, you should definitely keep writing.;) That's about all I've got to say except, WOW. This board is EMPTY!!!:eek: We get it all to ourselves!:p (jk):D


-Raven37

[Raven13]

I'm thinking about moving this story over to the Worlds Finest Writting Corner and then adding a few twists to maybe match up with Teen Titans or some other show!:D



Chapter 1





“Ivy get up it is time for chores!” My older brother then yelled at me. He was 22 and he always had to look after me. His name was Jonathan, though he was 2 years older than me we were like twins.



So I climbed out of my cot and got ready for the day. As I walked outside of my door I saw my mother making breakfast.



“Honey, you’re late again. You must go help your father and brother with the farm chores. You know that they can’t get done with out you.” My mother had said. “Those taxes have been rising again by the British and I don’t think that we can afford anything more if you don’t help work.”



“Yes mother, I will help rate after breakfast.” I then said. However I did not want to work. The Revolutionary War had been taking over my life. First we had to move out of Western Pennsylvania because of the Proclamation Line of 1763. Then the taxes are rising on everything so most of our supplies have to be hand made if we want to survive. I always had to listen to my mother because if I did not I would be punished very badly.



After breakfast I ran outside to help my father and Jonathan.



“Ivy, you must go feed the chickens and then help us with the cows. After that I would like you to go to the store and then pick me up a bag of flour for your mother.” My father then said.



After I was done working on the farm I raced down to the store. When I finally got down there, there was a crowd of people all standing around. Mr. Smith was standing on a platform with a piece of paper in his hand and he was screaming out something that I did not understand. As I made my way through the crowd and into the store, the store owner Mr. Wood was standing there listening to what Mr. Smith had to say.



“That is a shame that the British have to put another tax on us again.” Mr. Wood then replied.



“What do you mean they are going to tax us again?” I then asked back.



“Well all the British solders need a home to live in and they want us the people to have the British live in our houses until the war is over. We have to feed them, take care of them, give them supplies, and other needs that they need. No mater how much you may refuse they will force you to take care of them. This is called the Quartering Act.”



I was shocked on what I was hearing. Thinking it over again it pretty much means that we have to take care of the enemy. I then bought the flour and left the store still in shock. On the way home I saw a sign on a tree. It was advertising the Quartering Act. So I ripped it down and ran to show my whole family.





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[Tobias]

Well, this story's taking an interesting turn. Can't wait to see the next part.

[can_i_live_777]

Wow, that was not what I expected after reading the prologue. very interesting. keep it coming. Oh yeah, and don't get discouraged over the whole "nobody-ever-reviewing-a-single-frigging-thing-even-though-my-thread-has-almost-a-hundred-views-because-everyone-just-looks-at-it-and-nods-their-head-rather-then-taking-the-time-to-write-a-thirty-second-review" thing. It happens quite a bit.

[Tenku]

Oooh, very interesting. :)



Oh yeah, and don't get discouraged over the whole "nobody-ever-reviewing-a-single-frigging-thing-even-though-my-thread-has-almost-a-hundred-views-because-everyone-just-looks-at-it-and-nods-their-head-rather-then-taking-the-time-to-write-a-thirty-second-review" thing. It happens quite a bit.
Yeah, what he says. I've got 200+ views, but only 3 replies that are not mine. Sure, I was frustrated for a while, but I got over it. Besides, it takes a bit to read and people are scared to read more than a few words. :shrug:

[Tobias]

Uh, Can_I_Live, can you edit your post a bit? The thread's more stretched out than Ashlee Simpson's fifteen minutes of fame.

[Raven13]

It has been awhile but here is my next chapter!:D




Chapter 2





I then slammed open the almost breaking it and had the paper flying in my hand.



“What do you got there Ivy?” My father then asked.



“FATHER, the British are taxing us again! Here…read this.” I then handed him the paper and my mother and brother then huddled around to see what was going on. They were astonished on what they were reading.



“This is outrageous, we already have enough problems as it is, and now they are making us feed and supply 2 other people, from the different side of the war!” My father then said.



“When are they arriving?” my mother then asked.



“Well it says here……… May 23, 1766.” My brother said out loud.



“Why that is tomorrow! We can’t supply these people, we barley have enough money to even feed ourselves!” My mother then said.



“What are we going to do then?” I then asked.



“Well we will have to work on the farm more and also we will have to save our money for more important things. Jonathan and I will work on the farm and get more things accomplished, and sell as much as we can. Ivy, you and your mother can work inside the house and keep it clean and tend to there every need.” Father then explained.



I thought of something and decided to state my point, “Say if we do not want to take care of these people?” I then asked. I never wanted to work for the enemy and I was not going to.



“Well I this paper it says that if anyone refuses to work for the British the British have the right to kill anyone who refuses.” My brother then told me.



I was shocked; I did not want to work for someone who was going to destroy my country anyway. I will die not working for these beasts if I had to.



That night I lay in my bed next to my brother thinking about the people coming. There were only 2 beds in our house so where would we all sleep. How could the British be so mean to us. They know that we are poor and we already have more taxes to pay. All they want is money! That is all the British want, money however was a horrible thing.



I then closed my eyes and drifted off to sleep. That night I had a dream. I was in the middle of a battle field and all these shots were flying everywhere. Then a British solder fell and I ran over to help him. Then next in my dream while I was helping him I got shot.



I then shot up out of my bed. I was sweating and the nightmare was over. Though it seemed so short the dream repeated so many times. The next this I knew I saw a tad bit of Sunlight hit my eyes through the window.



It was the day I had dreaded… May 23 1766.




I think i'm going to keep my chapters short form now on, so there easer to read!!:anime:




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[Raven13]

Besides, it takes a bit to read and people are scared to read more than a few words. :shrug:
Yeah I see what you mean! Nobody really likes to read! Well i hope i get some replys!:sweat:

O Well if know one does reply i'll prolly jsut convert this story of the the Wrolds finest writting corner and then add a few things to make it relate to Teen Titans or something!:D

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[Punisher]

The Revolutionary War had been taking over my life. First we had to move out of Western Pennsylvania because of the Proclamation Line of 1763.

I'm sorry, does this story take place in 1766 or later? Because the Revolutionary War began in 75, and it would not make sense to say it took over your life in '66. I think you mean after the French and Indian War, which ended in '63. But otherwise it is pretty good writing, and I'm interested to see where it goes.

[Raven13]

Yeah, sorry I guess your right! It does take place in 1766 so I guess Ishould have said that the British were taking over my life!:D Thanks for pointing that out and I might get teh next chapter written like next week or something!


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[Neko Konneko]

That was reeeeeally good! It's got a really interesting plot line! You defently need to keep posting!!!!